Here's some more Jerry Clower flair we can add to the story:
- Dialogue: We can pepper the dialogue with Southern colloquialisms. For instance, instead of "good day," the wolf could say, "Well howdy there, little Red Ridin' Hood." Red Riding-Hood, in turn, could reply, "Why bless your heart, Mr. Wolf!"
- Details: We can add details that paint a vivid picture. When Red Riding-Hood picks flowers, describe them as "brighter than a sunrise on a butter churn." The wolf's fur peeking out from under the nightgown could be "scraggly as a chicken after a fox fight."
- Reactions: Let's exaggerate Red Riding-Hood's initial trust and the woodcutter's suspicion. Red Riding-Hood could answer the wolf's questions "as innocent as a possum playin' dead." The woodcutter, on the other hand, could eye the wolf with "more suspicion than a hound dog at a picnic."
- Humor: Jerry Clower is known for his folksy humor. We can add a touch by describing the wolf's attempt to disguise himself as the grandmother as "lookin' more like a coyote wearin' yo' granny's Sunday best."
Here's an example with these additions:
Now, that ol' wolf, slyer than a greased watermelon seed, drawled out, "Well howdy there, little Red Ridin' Hood. Where you headin' with that basket on your arm?"
Red Riding-Hood, bless her innocent heart, answered as innocent as a possum playin' dead, "Why bless your heart, Mr. Wolf! Takin' some goodies to my granny over yonder."
Meanwhile, the woodcutter choppin' away nearby eyed that wolf with more suspicion than a hound dog at a picnic. He thought to himself, "Now somethin' ain't right about that there critter visitin' Red Ridin' Hood's granny!"
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